tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post6361050537705026768..comments2024-02-22T07:47:22.661-05:00Comments on The Bathroom Monologues: Bathroom Monologue: ExecutedJohn Wiswellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comBlogger35125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-42134295509486269572012-09-26T09:20:23.203-04:002012-09-26T09:20:23.203-04:00Quite right, Stephen! Of course Mr. James isn'...Quite right, Stephen! Of course Mr. James isn't the ward of a child. Thank you for catching that - I will correct it immediately.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-4101399364226768772012-09-26T02:43:54.228-04:002012-09-26T02:43:54.228-04:00Hi there John -- I like the rolling reveal, the to...Hi there John -- I like the rolling reveal, the tone, and the deftly sketched characters. Jedidiah was also a well chosen name for a cult child. I found myself holding on for the child's final comment, throughout, and some suitably dark logic was the result. One tiny thing: 'My ward and I...' I wasn't sure to what that referred. His 'ward' would imply he was looking after someone -- though I may have gotten confused somewhere. Good story and for some reason, I don't rate the doctors' chances. St. Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10111660663883108862noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-81380534009208521512012-09-24T20:35:20.628-04:002012-09-24T20:35:20.628-04:00A seven-year-old boy's question loops in my mi...A seven-year-old boy's question loops in my mind again and again, each time I find it chilling, each time I find myself waiting to hear the answer..but does one come? Or does the child end up ignored with a guilty shake of the head? <br /><br />Loved this piece John, even if the subject was one to frown about. Cindy Vaskovahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747628778627025130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-56454683451454396692012-09-23T14:31:45.266-04:002012-09-23T14:31:45.266-04:00You don't think you agree with a seven-year-ol...You don't think you agree with a seven-year-old's logic? Would you care to elaborate?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-74834329780271872192012-09-23T14:13:14.059-04:002012-09-23T14:13:14.059-04:00Certainly a very dark piece. I'm not sure I ag...Certainly a very dark piece. I'm not sure I agree with the boy's logic but you suffused the whole story with an air of humanity.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-14249009325198196762012-09-23T03:10:49.853-04:002012-09-23T03:10:49.853-04:00Great style in this short John.. Shawshank meets J...Great style in this short John.. Shawshank meets James M Cain meets John Wiswell.. I still can't help thinking that the boy is a little psychotic rather than a champion of anti-capital punishment .. A thoughtful piece ..Fabulous work.tom gillespiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14587969162663951721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-89809506342987160542012-09-22T21:19:51.581-04:002012-09-22T21:19:51.581-04:00The logic of a young child is a difficult thing to...The logic of a young child is a difficult thing to refute - this was a departure from what I've come to expect from you John however I continue to be impressed - there is so much drama and tension and the sadness of it all is handled with care. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-77866923342312034822012-09-22T14:20:03.643-04:002012-09-22T14:20:03.643-04:00Powerful, John.
The moment I read that Marianne w...Powerful, John.<br /><br />The moment I read that Marianne was Jedidiah's mother and how young he was, my heart stopped. His continued silence and then final speech left me speechless.<br /><br />JaiJai Joshihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04858987106548357551noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-43324107920700017832012-09-22T10:04:56.192-04:002012-09-22T10:04:56.192-04:00Well told John, I was looking for the twist ending...Well told John, I was looking for the twist ending in which the boy was the leader of the cult and had done the murders(Just shows my mindset I guess.)Jason Wardenhttp://jasonwarden.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-72147084190264807452012-09-22T05:16:50.282-04:002012-09-22T05:16:50.282-04:00Seven is far too young to be drinking coffeee anyw...Seven is far too young to be drinking coffeee anyway. Jedidiah is a wise boy, I think. Nice job. Will we get to read Marianne's story, I wonder?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-10435831945072604492012-09-22T03:15:27.616-04:002012-09-22T03:15:27.616-04:00What clever boys! John and Jedidiah, both!What clever boys! John and Jedidiah, both!Natalie Woodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10782295299918125923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-27651735394508544872012-09-21T23:04:12.896-04:002012-09-21T23:04:12.896-04:00Apparently the death certificate gave homicide as ...Apparently the death certificate gave homicide as the cause of death. Sorry - I should have made that clear.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-72300356615090523042012-09-21T22:54:40.067-04:002012-09-21T22:54:40.067-04:00It's interesting to me to write around inevita...It's interesting to me to write around inevitable circumstances from time to time. It feels a little odd I hadn't approached an execution before, actually. Thanks, Pete!John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-52856556882228110112012-09-21T22:53:47.079-04:002012-09-21T22:53:47.079-04:00That was positively an error, Helen, the result of...That was positively an error, Helen, the result of giving it a last-pass edit far too late into my day. Thank you for pointing it out - I've corrected it now.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-18827340199050802282012-09-21T22:53:01.715-04:002012-09-21T22:53:01.715-04:00So glad you got so much out of it, Aaron. That is ...So glad you got so much out of it, Aaron. That is everything I could have asked to do for a reader - thank you for relaying it back to me.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-72504152807265946962012-09-21T22:44:20.035-04:002012-09-21T22:44:20.035-04:00The possibilities are broad, and tempting for fict...The possibilities are broad, and tempting for fiction...John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-28682398026965954462012-09-21T22:43:56.452-04:002012-09-21T22:43:56.452-04:00The cult may show up in other work, Marc. I'm ...The cult may show up in other work, Marc. I'm not sure about that yet, but there may be a distinct story for them.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-44461782827278470852012-09-21T22:42:33.007-04:002012-09-21T22:42:33.007-04:00A likely prophecy, good Noland.A likely prophecy, good Noland.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-64349987098147358042012-09-21T22:42:16.243-04:002012-09-21T22:42:16.243-04:00So long as it exists it might be best if the subje...So long as it exists it might be best if the subject is quite untidy. Thank you for the kind words - may I ask what you read as the narrator's voice?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-37525660893039811222012-09-21T22:41:38.762-04:002012-09-21T22:41:38.762-04:00Was it listed by the program, or by some governmen...Was it listed by the program, or by some governmental body?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-91569873273079780052012-09-21T18:54:58.923-04:002012-09-21T18:54:58.923-04:00OOh, clever. Loved the informal narrative with one...OOh, clever. Loved the informal narrative with one hell of a clincher. Nice work, John.Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-69551317225741704842012-09-21T18:25:11.062-04:002012-09-21T18:25:11.062-04:00Out of the mouths of children...
Out of the mouths of children...<br /><br />Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-26593331959258640572012-09-21T18:08:57.577-04:002012-09-21T18:08:57.577-04:00A child's simple justice. Brilliant.A child's simple justice. Brilliant.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-16784161753681968602012-09-21T15:45:15.806-04:002012-09-21T15:45:15.806-04:00The simplicity of the narrative makes the impact t...The simplicity of the narrative makes the impact that much stronger.Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-91755736989569685892012-09-21T14:01:43.033-04:002012-09-21T14:01:43.033-04:00Oh this was such an interesting take on an executi...Oh this was such an interesting take on an execution. And a chilling ending.Virginia Moffatthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12071059148315715405noreply@blogger.com