tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post6946123242019663962..comments2024-02-22T07:47:22.661-05:00Comments on The Bathroom Monologues: Bathroom Monologue: Ghost DancerJohn Wiswellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comBlogger39125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-16330744905296067252010-10-14T06:33:08.975-04:002010-10-14T06:33:08.975-04:00Really enjoyed that. It sums up the imaginations o...Really enjoyed that. It sums up the imaginations of young girls pefectly.Rebecca Eminhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01931904595437049369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-3872691587626776692010-10-10T22:47:22.689-04:002010-10-10T22:47:22.689-04:00The dialogue of the two young girls is spot-on. I ...The dialogue of the two young girls is spot-on. I enjoyed it. With such an imagination, I'd say the one girl is poised to be a writer some day.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-19150629460989483462010-10-10T15:26:42.742-04:002010-10-10T15:26:42.742-04:00This is a lovely & sweet story. The girls'...This is a lovely & sweet story. The girls' imagination is so typical.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-86651992388500738192010-10-10T11:16:34.387-04:002010-10-10T11:16:34.387-04:00Maybe he doesn't know he has a ghost girlfrien...Maybe he doesn't know he has a ghost girlfriend ;-)<br /><br />Very sweet tale. Reminds me of my sister and our conversations as kids.<br /><br />Perfect.<br />~2Tomara Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-27486157662483506602010-10-10T08:45:28.683-04:002010-10-10T08:45:28.683-04:00Lovely story. What I want to know is, who is he le...Lovely story. What I want to know is, who is he learning to waltz for, eh?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-39827491347698013592010-10-10T02:11:33.313-04:002010-10-10T02:11:33.313-04:00In a short time you made Lawrence a very believabl...In a short time you made Lawrence a very believable sympathetic character. An inspired story..:)Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-75368040222043288142010-10-10T02:01:06.458-04:002010-10-10T02:01:06.458-04:00Several have asked about my dancing. For multiple ...Several have asked about my dancing. For multiple health reasons I hadn't been to a dance until my mid-twenties, and didn't participate there. One night I decided to figure out some of the dances with help from Youtube. It did not work very well, but you can only teach a rhino so fine a step.<br /><br />Aidan, that's part my ineptitude and part theirs. I know very little about dance as I just admitted above. Lawrence is trying to waltz but can't with his clumsy body, much as I (with a better leg) can't do the 1-2 motion without a second step trying to compensate with what I'm doing.<br /><br />Jon, thanks for catching that typo.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-5879170546099520292010-10-10T01:49:26.917-04:002010-10-10T01:49:26.917-04:00I absolutely loved this one, John. The dialog betw...I absolutely loved this one, John. The dialog between the two girls was terrific. I loved how the one girl even managed to convince herself that she actually saw his dance partner. :)<br /><br />One little typo...<br />with longs legs and fingers<br /><br />Otherwise, just perfect.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/MadUtopia/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-12056610270510927022010-10-10T00:42:29.903-04:002010-10-10T00:42:29.903-04:00Lovely premise. I really liked the opening line. ...Lovely premise. I really liked the opening line. However, their initial comments that he's taking two steps here and two steps there made me think he was dancing a rumba instead of a waltz (three steps)... but since he says this at the end, I guess he's still working on that coordination thing. I wish him luck.AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-78708090733604541602010-10-09T22:28:34.176-04:002010-10-09T22:28:34.176-04:00The creative minds of little girls. Mine is 11 - I...The creative minds of little girls. Mine is 11 - I know these things. LOL I loved the story, John. I really wished he had a ghost lover, but you got a smile out of me at the end. And for the record, I'm sure you looked like a crazy person. :) But did the lessons work?Danielle La Pagliahttp://www.daniellelapaglia.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-56370698482305903502010-10-09T18:35:55.302-04:002010-10-09T18:35:55.302-04:00You destroyed my fantasy too, although you did it ...You destroyed my fantasy too, although you did it remarkably well. Smooth and funny transition from dreamland to real life. <br /><br />I'd like to see how you'd look like practicing. Maybe in tattered purple pants? hehhe :PMarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07303695124956391293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-14581697923407898542010-10-09T18:29:38.221-04:002010-10-09T18:29:38.221-04:00Lovely ... I could see Lawrence and had a sense of...Lovely ... I could see Lawrence and had a sense of the girls; I kind of agree with whoever said that if it wasn't for the computer, etc., it could have been a story set in an earlier time.Janet Lingel Aldrichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05633969913976791146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-30914680130070826752010-10-09T13:20:47.068-04:002010-10-09T13:20:47.068-04:00You do such a cool job with these little shorts. T...You do such a cool job with these little shorts. The end was a cute reveal, I figured the one girl was right and he was dancing with Mary Jane....Carrie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05093923008179106837noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-28299155526038732482010-10-09T10:48:22.524-04:002010-10-09T10:48:22.524-04:00This was a great read, i really enjoyed peeping wi...This was a great read, i really enjoyed peeping with the two younger sisters at their brother dancing the awkward dance. Is he preparing for a prom partner he'll never have or has yet to pluck up the courage to ask?<br />I also love the way the girls flex their growing language ability.flyingscribblerhttp://flyingscribbler.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-91350576583940960752010-10-09T07:38:46.897-04:002010-10-09T07:38:46.897-04:00This is great! How deceiving looks can be...This is great! How deceiving looks can be...Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-34910248088513459462010-10-09T01:26:14.195-04:002010-10-09T01:26:14.195-04:00This was a nifty read, John... Trying to teach you...This was a nifty read, John... Trying to teach yourself the waltz, eh?<br /><br />I'd say your summary line worked...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11413377601369107260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-31594623709813733922010-10-08T21:59:46.972-04:002010-10-08T21:59:46.972-04:00This was just beautiful. You have captured the un...This was just beautiful. You have captured the ungainliness of adolescence so well and the conspiratorial nature of little sisters. And a wonderful warmth between the siblings.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-47470509004578974142010-10-08T21:37:44.322-04:002010-10-08T21:37:44.322-04:00I just loved the descriptions of Lawrence. The gir...I just loved the descriptions of Lawrence. The girls had me laughing, how true of sisters, and their brother. What a fantastic story. Thank you.Crystalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15106973483461489686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-2248882352214360372010-10-08T20:43:17.202-04:002010-10-08T20:43:17.202-04:00Just got home from a day with Mom. Gave her a good...Just got home from a day with Mom. Gave her a good birthday, but it was exhausting. So nice to read all these responses.<br /><br />This story actually came about when I was teaching myself to waltz via Youtube. Had to give my "instructor" the shout out. Though I live on the second floor, I wondered what I'd look like.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-73010514797161353782010-10-08T20:37:48.429-04:002010-10-08T20:37:48.429-04:00Got to love the imagination! :)
I liked the ghost ...Got to love the imagination! :)<br />I liked the ghost girl idea! <br /><br />What a great story!A. S. Boudreauhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01158308489406327088noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-49007079437945507102010-10-08T17:28:47.700-04:002010-10-08T17:28:47.700-04:00It was quite cute but no bad thing, was a really g...It was quite cute but no bad thing, was a really great punchline.Adam John Keeperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05954915030178318057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-27857730885178250072010-10-08T16:34:16.318-04:002010-10-08T16:34:16.318-04:00And here I was awwing over his relationship with a...And here I was awwing over his relationship with a ghost girl, and you had to go and ruin my little daydream. I laughed at the last line, though.<br /><br />And then spent ten minutes watching youtube videos of waltz lessons :-PA. M. Hartehttp://amharte.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-4570777601449810732010-10-08T16:16:57.285-04:002010-10-08T16:16:57.285-04:00There are some nice touches in this very pleasant ...There are some nice touches in this very pleasant story, I too liked the logic of the sentence " If you don't see anything... etc"<br /><br />I was pretty sure there was a twist coming, but wasn't sure what it would be. :)Steve Greenhttp://greenstephenj.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-53426530189650833272010-10-08T16:07:32.223-04:002010-10-08T16:07:32.223-04:00Aww. That made my laugh out loud too! I love your ...Aww. That made my laugh out loud too! I love your description of Lawrence, I really saw him.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-44406380626697589902010-10-08T15:57:50.316-04:002010-10-08T15:57:50.316-04:00Cute! Young girls have such imagination.Cute! Young girls have such imagination.Genevieve Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16178276724159826428noreply@blogger.com