tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post8459554521486255286..comments2024-02-22T07:47:22.661-05:00Comments on The Bathroom Monologues: Bathroom Monologue: Message for Mona LiddelJohn Wiswellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comBlogger39125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-21588317272302355282013-05-06T08:42:25.930-04:002013-05-06T08:42:25.930-04:00Wow that is going to be a hard message to hear- if...Wow that is going to be a hard message to hear- if Kevin has got hold of the right person, that is. Great job John bit of a departure from your usual humor but very well written as always.Brindahttp://modscheherzade.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-41692274497610458252013-05-05T09:12:33.515-04:002013-05-05T09:12:33.515-04:00John...if I didn't read this in work I would h...John...if I didn't read this in work I would have cried...it's so intense and sweet...well done! Franny Stevensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12428942126501817824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-86186181822432733512013-05-04T13:02:27.752-04:002013-05-04T13:02:27.752-04:00Wow, there's a whole world of hurt right there...Wow, there's a whole world of hurt right there...but as much as I want to empathise with the narrator, I can't help but wonder how his mother will feel when she hears it.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-33906174632524911062013-05-04T10:52:52.258-04:002013-05-04T10:52:52.258-04:00This scenario is so painfully realistic, John! The...This scenario is so painfully realistic, John! There is the nervousness and there is the anticipation. But the person on the other side of the line must be equally nervous and unsure, be it his mother or someone else, right? <br />Actually I can kinda imagine this happening over Facebook. Leave a message, stalk the profile?<br />Don't mind my blabbering. It's a great piece and I really enjoyed reading it. Cindy Vaskovahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747628778627025130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-34076090215689819882013-05-04T08:40:07.687-04:002013-05-04T08:40:07.687-04:00Broke my heart a little, because it did feel so re...Broke my heart a little, because it did feel so real. I feel bad for this guy- he seems so lost.<br /><br />I love that the doctor "smells like fish food"- it's one of those details that's entirely too odd not to sound true.<br /><br />All-in-all really great piece.Bevimushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924337684790883853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-73013760679723845572013-05-04T00:51:03.044-04:002013-05-04T00:51:03.044-04:00Nice job capturing the voice in this.Nice job capturing the voice in this.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-7565273433476032312013-05-03T21:24:04.935-04:002013-05-03T21:24:04.935-04:00Great job. Really caught the nervousness of the sp...Great job. Really caught the nervousness of the speaker.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-19829350010749572692013-05-03T18:01:03.727-04:002013-05-03T18:01:03.727-04:00I think it was his sense of desperation when he sa...I think it was his sense of desperation when he said things like 'You think my name is ‘Jesse’ – it’s not, it was my dog’s name as a kid' 'Howard Kleinman, he smells like fish food.' etc ^_^ or maybe it's just my weird sense of humour ;)Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-84891841875514042042013-05-03T16:15:56.320-04:002013-05-03T16:15:56.320-04:00Gripping. I think you captured the emotion of the ...Gripping. I think you captured the emotion of the situation perfectly. I agree with others, it felt very authentic.Shellihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03068094486297918345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-61397937121860419602013-05-03T16:14:04.072-04:002013-05-03T16:14:04.072-04:00Loved Kevin's voice in this. The rambling, uns...Loved Kevin's voice in this. The rambling, unsure speech made this feel intensely real. Nicely done.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-26826115105013249492013-05-03T16:11:24.362-04:002013-05-03T16:11:24.362-04:00Of course your Kevin is being greedy - he is very,...Of course your Kevin is being greedy - he is very, very human. 'Don't ask, won't get?'Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-20804377340447496052013-05-03T15:46:44.301-04:002013-05-03T15:46:44.301-04:00I felt sad and squirmy alternately with this one. ...I felt sad and squirmy alternately with this one. I really like it when you go all natural on us! Peter Newmanhttp://www.runpetewrite.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-82949078898722799582013-05-03T15:20:38.831-04:002013-05-03T15:20:38.831-04:00Hi John, I'm re-posting this story on Facebook...Hi John, I'm re-posting this story on Facebook - it's as - no, more powerful even than the one about the boy who was conceived during a rape, speaking about his mother's funeral. I'm also leaving you a private message on Facebook. Very, very well done indeed. Natalie Woodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10782295299918125923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-68905535969816013962013-05-03T14:45:25.595-04:002013-05-03T14:45:25.595-04:00You've given us a view of a young boy's wa...You've given us a view of a young boy's way to try and be grown up about an incredibly frightening experience - one which someone so young shouldn't have to endure.<br /><br />I really like the opening: "This isn't a crank call. You put me up for adoption in Raleigh, North Carolina in 1995. You left me a toy airplane..."<br /><br />The woman would have no doubt either way after an opening like that - either it is, or it isn't her who is the mother.<br /><br />Fehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18344347287087639537noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-40697050642085496092013-05-03T11:33:56.601-04:002013-05-03T11:33:56.601-04:00I really like this, John. It's really sad and ...I really like this, John. It's really sad and anxious and hopeful. If there was information left behind for Kevin to find, perhaps Mona wants to be found after all. What a shame that it's so late. Hopefully she doesn't get the message too late. And hopefully Kevin has the right Mona Liddel. Good stuff to be left with at the end of a story.Celestehttp://www.runningnekkid.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-72508175524273454192013-05-03T11:21:41.057-04:002013-05-03T11:21:41.057-04:00I really enjoyed that. I could really imagine some...I really enjoyed that. I could really imagine someone doing that.Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-5288598151034197502013-05-03T11:18:31.233-04:002013-05-03T11:18:31.233-04:00I really liked the way you handled the sentiment b...I really liked the way you handled the sentiment behind this Jon, even if one or two of the lines seemed a bit incredulous (the industrial accident) but they didn't take anything away from the piece as a whole which i thought was really strong<br /><br />marc nashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-58104578392518409402013-05-03T10:37:04.584-04:002013-05-03T10:37:04.584-04:00I don't know! You left that part Schroedinger-...I don't know! You left that part Schroedinger-ly unresolved! ;-)Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-48263432892585675622013-05-03T09:58:57.649-04:002013-05-03T09:58:57.649-04:00Wow, that is one tough message to leave. Hopefully...Wow, that is one tough message to leave. Hopefully she goes back to see him.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-90382328892449760002013-05-03T09:53:24.161-04:002013-05-03T09:53:24.161-04:00Thank you for the kind words, Shell, and sorry if ...Thank you for the kind words, Shell, and sorry if I triggered anything.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-53457598634861896462013-05-03T09:52:56.162-04:002013-05-03T09:52:56.162-04:00Do you think he picked wrong?Do you think he picked wrong?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-44598733972732764942013-05-03T09:52:39.396-04:002013-05-03T09:52:39.396-04:00How much of a sketch do you think it is, on one or...How much of a sketch do you think it is, on one or the other?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-20338921686687552632013-05-03T09:52:12.627-04:002013-05-03T09:52:12.627-04:00Thank you, Wayne! Thank you, Wayne! John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-31643408487337094532013-05-03T09:48:08.507-04:002013-05-03T09:48:08.507-04:00I have to ask! What struck you as comedic about th...I have to ask! What struck you as comedic about this one, Helen?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-43717829818828870952013-05-03T09:47:43.082-04:002013-05-03T09:47:43.082-04:00I think if it's hard to witness without being ...I think if it's hard to witness without being something you want to junk, then it probably worked. But maybe my imagination is limited. This is about an incredibly hard thing to express. Are there other ways you'd execute it? I'm very curious!John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.com