tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post879105481221362760..comments2024-02-22T07:47:22.661-05:00Comments on The Bathroom Monologues: You Aren't - #fridayflashJohn Wiswellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-36067418395415009522014-05-05T09:14:04.145-04:002014-05-05T09:14:04.145-04:00This is why second-person is so fraught with dange...This is why second-person is so fraught with danger. Good work with the slime, John.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-27788615310513036302014-05-04T16:28:02.311-04:002014-05-04T16:28:02.311-04:00That was so clever my brain hurts. (In a good way,...That was so clever my brain hurts. (In a good way, I'm sure.) I think I'll go play a first-person game on Xbox. Chuck Allenhttp://www.chuckallen.us/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-27935366233084952072014-05-04T16:17:35.852-04:002014-05-04T16:17:35.852-04:00I guess dissolving and floating becomes ok at some...I guess dissolving and floating becomes ok at some point...Cindy Vaskovahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06747628778627025130noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-17572376804545029242014-05-04T15:42:10.194-04:002014-05-04T15:42:10.194-04:00Loving the POV battle with the slime. The little t...Loving the POV battle with the slime. The little twist with the salt, was nice, too. This is brilliant. I'd love to see you write something like this playing with tense. Shell Flowerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08127004188099765270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-76031689838171142092014-05-04T10:37:35.415-04:002014-05-04T10:37:35.415-04:00A nice bit o' fiction here, John. I love how e...A nice bit o' fiction here, John. I love how everything thrown at the blob only makes it stronger. So how do you kill it? Stop feeding it. But then, I can't do anything about that now. I'm too dissolved and floating along with the first person POV's cranium to be able to do anything now. I guess maybe the third person will fare better.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-70795343024946633962014-05-04T09:52:18.024-04:002014-05-04T09:52:18.024-04:00Ooh that bit with the salt was clever!Ooh that bit with the salt was clever!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-70859357085034857282014-05-04T09:32:36.538-04:002014-05-04T09:32:36.538-04:00Hah, niiice.
That's just messed up. I had to r...Hah, niiice.<br />That's just messed up. I had to read it through twice. Like having a second scoop and thankee kindly!<br />Donald Conradhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11299995538611948494noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-69663458989582523802014-05-03T19:12:22.289-04:002014-05-03T19:12:22.289-04:00Loved the fun with the narrative construction! Som...Loved the fun with the narrative construction! Somewhere out there is a short story called "Golden Wings" that somehow this reminds me of, even though that one's set in medieval times and has no slime mold at all. And perhaps is the poorer for it.Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-32730225484700927682014-05-02T17:25:51.152-04:002014-05-02T17:25:51.152-04:00Alex could be right!
Hello again it's been a w...Alex could be right!<br />Hello again it's been a whileJohn Going Gentlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14958171262765033946noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-75861721423377294542014-05-02T17:24:31.734-04:002014-05-02T17:24:31.734-04:00You should have thrown acid at it. Or maybe lots o...You should have thrown acid at it. Or maybe lots of plastic - very undigestible! Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-852242473969360452014-05-02T14:44:52.183-04:002014-05-02T14:44:52.183-04:00Ethylene glycol might have done the trick. But who...Ethylene glycol might have done the trick. But who keeps antifreeze on the 2nd floor?<br /><br />I've read one other second-person short, IIRC, so you're in rare company here. It worked for me, actually pretty well.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-8593415468142753782014-05-02T11:41:17.976-04:002014-05-02T11:41:17.976-04:00He should've flung pepper instead.He should've flung pepper instead.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-91277614086312286742014-05-02T06:18:12.354-04:002014-05-02T06:18:12.354-04:00a bravura structure. Does the second person become...a bravura structure. Does the second person become the 3rd person disembodied voice once inside thew slime? but then what of the first person? Does that move from being first person singular to first person plural now that it has another human abutting it? Delicious prospectsSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-49065965285757964632014-05-02T05:20:29.598-04:002014-05-02T05:20:29.598-04:00I guess not being, was the best thing to be. I e...I guess not being, was the best thing to be. I enjoyed reading this. ^_^ Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.com