tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post6207353469506369344..comments2024-02-22T07:47:22.661-05:00Comments on The Bathroom Monologues: Bathroom Monologue: Feldman will Never be a ManJohn Wiswellhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-53368644996332079512010-02-16T11:54:29.244-05:002010-02-16T11:54:29.244-05:00Thank you all for the comments! I'm glad the t...Thank you all for the comments! I'm glad the tension worked, and hope not too many of you were disappointed that Feldman wasn't stabbed.<br /><br />Peggy: I guess the "colored" thing comes from knowing several old ladies who speak that way, and its certain hateful connotation. You're certainly right that it's not the proper term for people of color today, and so seems dated.<br /><br />As far as it getting so few comments, I wonder if I offended. I know Afterlife Week had low turnout in general.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-7393822733551665482010-02-16T02:28:52.426-05:002010-02-16T02:28:52.426-05:00First, I apologize for stopping by so late. Valent...First, I apologize for stopping by so late. Valentine's Day, restaurant biz... excuse yes, but well, now I have time.<br /><br />This was brilliant. There was so much innuendo hidden and I found myself going back to double check that I wasn't overreading.<br /><br />I agree, the knife brought a beaufitul tension to the story, and made the gossiping old women uncomfortbable. The shirt thing was fabulous too.<br /><br />The time frame confused me, and it could be my spotty education. Snapping like 'colored' girls and 'mad cow' phrasing, for me, are from different eras, and I'm not sure the time-setting of this story. Not that 'when' this story takes place is important; but reconciling those 2 times in history took me out of the story for a moment.<br /><br />Otherwise, this was one of the better stories so far this week, for me. Funny; the two I've loved the most have fewer comments. Not sure what that means.peggyhttp://pegjet.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-64334615010619999222010-02-15T11:02:49.907-05:002010-02-15T11:02:49.907-05:00There was a lot of tension in this, thankfully his...There was a lot of tension in this, thankfully his sister told him to be polite. Nasty old women, but I wonder what detestable thing they felt from him - perhaps his hatred?CJ Hodges MacFarlanehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16833789408143274185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-59918715989336921792010-02-14T04:20:22.532-05:002010-02-14T04:20:22.532-05:00The old ladies scared me. With the tension of han...The old ladies scared me. With the tension of handing over the knife, I felt certain something worse was going to happen.David Mastershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12809185582216906363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-79147593544314595572010-02-13T13:16:29.474-05:002010-02-13T13:16:29.474-05:00Ha, love this line "I inherited a lot of shir...Ha, love this line "I inherited a lot of shirts that don't fit me this week" That says so much. Maybe he is a bigger man than his father was, yes? :-)shannonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17063218369150683990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-25660104819383769942010-02-13T13:13:15.887-05:002010-02-13T13:13:15.887-05:00Good story. You did a great job with the character...Good story. You did a great job with the characterization in this one.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-1753313315675998122010-02-13T11:59:19.266-05:002010-02-13T11:59:19.266-05:00Thanks for catching that, Mazz!Thanks for catching that, Mazz!John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-1192689126017267732010-02-13T04:53:11.975-05:002010-02-13T04:53:11.975-05:00an interesting portait of both characters - Feldma...an interesting portait of both characters - Feldman and the collective of petty old biddies!<br /><br />The knife added some extra tension, certainly<br /><br />Tiny mis-sight in this sentence I think: "because it reminds you know what’s coming"mazzz in Leedshttp://mazzz-in-leeds.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-77057191808176283892010-02-12T20:52:35.500-05:002010-02-12T20:52:35.500-05:00I think he would have looked a bit crazed, standin...I think he would have looked a bit crazed, standing there with a knife and sleeves stained with carrot juice! Old biddies!Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-67528989555039847902010-02-12T20:45:07.990-05:002010-02-12T20:45:07.990-05:00Thank you both! I hope the thoughts it inspired we...Thank you both! I hope the thoughts it inspired were pleasant, or at least useful. Though it looks like this is a highly unpopular #fridayflash.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-52469640710745748122010-02-12T19:55:37.145-05:002010-02-12T19:55:37.145-05:00John, I thought this was wonderful. I loved how he...John, I thought this was wonderful. I loved how he showed those little biddies how a real man was. The use of the knife as a tension point - fabulous. Peace, LindaLindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01110078016784294934noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3337042377966398742.post-66596637841822025912010-02-12T16:04:39.030-05:002010-02-12T16:04:39.030-05:00I like this story. It made me think. Now I need to...I like this story. It made me think. Now I need to go back and read the others sometime.Joz Varlohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12750541029227514781noreply@blogger.com