Friday, July 9, 2010

Bathroom Monologue: Dialogue for two soldiers sweeping for snipers in Iraq, OR, Things John mumbled to himself watching Hurt Locker

"Gunman spotted on the minaret!"


"11 o'clock! On the minaret!"

"What's a minaret?"

"The tall building. Eyes up!"

"Why didn't you say tall building?"

"Because it's a fucking minaret!"


  1. Good one, John. Such is life anywhere.
    By the way, loved your Sea story!

    Giggles and Guns

  2. Very funny, though definitely a reason why the humanities are important for everyone, especially our soldiers. Peace...

  3. This is hilarious. :) Great work!

  4. Funny short short short! Or is that Microshort? I don't know. It was good.

  5. LOL! Awesome. Great laugh for a Friday afternoon. Thanks!

  6. Very realistic actually. I love you how immediately got into the scene and how both characters are distinct.

  7. GP, I think they're generally called "microfiction," but the state of sub-short-story-length fiction is such a mess that any name may be applied to almost anything.

    There are few more super-shorts coming, including one I simply titled, "How short can I make this one?" I'm glad you folks enjoyed the voice.


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