Tuesday, September 29, 2009

Bathroom Monologue: Two Love, OR, Dedicated to Trevor McPherson

Pinocchio wanted to be a real boy. The little mermaid wanted to be a real girl. They met at a bar, and ever afterward were simply themselves.

6 comments:

  1. and what she said to him as she sat upon his face?

    "Lie to me, then tell me the truth, lie..tell the truth..lie..'

    groan....

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  2. Yikes. Sorry to offend, Mr. Solender.

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  3. Well I enjoyed this one anyway.

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  4. you surely are not serious - offend me?.. i think its funny!

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  5. I guess some fairytales really do end with a 'ferry' and a 'tail' - absolutely no pun at you though Trevor.

    Nice one Michael...

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  6. *commenter inserts tongue firmly cheek (yes, his own)*
    Well, there's something fishy about this post, and the characters are rather wooden. Other than that, it was pretty good.

    I'm sure if you were to workshop the Pinochio character, he could be made to grow on the reader. And the mermaid would scale up nicely if you expanded this story to 4000-5000 words.

    Thanks for the Nod, John!

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